Audrey Ashira

ocean in a bottle

In freewrite, poetry on September 7, 2010 at 8:41 pm

I’m sending you the ocean in a bottle
Open it
Let it loose
Set it free.

I’m sending you the shoreline
In an envelope
Let it out
With your doubts

Dive in with me.

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  1. Nice imagery. Thanks for sharing.

  2. Beautiful words:3 Thank for sharing^^

  3. super cute, beautiful job!

  4. Happy Thursday, Thanks for the support.

  5. I really liked this sweet little poem. Thanks for sharing.

  6. I read this several times.
    Enjoyed it more and more ๐Ÿ™‚

  7. Oh my !! this was breath-stopper !! ๐Ÿ™‚

  8. Such lovely pictures you painted with this poem. I enjoyed it!

  9. Wow. Iยดd like to recieve an ocean in a bottle.
    Well done ๐Ÿ™‚

  10. Short and sweet, loved it.

    And I agree with ^^ hernamewaslaughter, I would like one too.

    ๐Ÿ™‚

  11. Sweet little poem..

    Rhyming Waters

    –Someone Is Special–

  12. sharp , to the point but sweet ๐Ÿ™‚

    I’ve never read a poem so crisp in words ๐Ÿ™‚

    good jo ๐Ÿ˜€

  13. simple and well said ๐Ÿ™‚ reminded me of a seashell ๐Ÿ˜€

    Rally Week 29, My Poem

  14. Divinely simple. Nice write here. Love and Light, Sender

  15. So much better than a message in the bottle and directly to the point! Wonderful play on the words.

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    visit and comment for 18 poets NEW from my participants list, and let me know after you are done.
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  17. At first I thought “Oh no, another poem about the ocean” but I was pleasantly surprised to find that it’s very unique. Loved it.

  18. Thanks so much for all your comments ๐Ÿ™‚

  19. I can feel the sea breeze and smell the salty air. I miss living at the ocean.

  20. Iโ€™m sending you the shoreline
    In an envelope
    Let it out
    With your doubts.

    wonderful. wonderful. im absolutely speechless.

  21. I will gladly dive in with you. Great poem (:

  22. Could naything have been more beautiful?

    I am prompted to quote ~
    “Every foot that walked along a path
    Left a telegram written in the stone”
    Pablo Neruda

    I am:
    http://puplumages.wordpress.com/2010/09/11/memories-rain/

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    you are nominated, you win one vote, if you vote for other poets, you win another vote.

    upon join the voting, you win at least a runner up award .
    Thanks for the attention.

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