Audrey Ashira

killing

In freewrite, poetry on September 9, 2010 at 10:47 pm

It’s killing me
Killing you
We’re dying slowly
So slowly
We can count each breath

It’s killing you
Killing me
We’re bleeding words
So many
We can taste our death

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  1. This was a killer! But this did NOT kill me! I can read it over and over..
    I loved the way you interchanged the me and you in the 2 stanzas.. it kinda added effect to the tone of the poem! Very nice!
    “taste our death” — chilling!!!

  2. Thank you so much:) I really appreciate your comments.

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